Sunday, 24 October 2010

New Fast Automatic Daffodils



There's a poem by one of the 'Mersey Beat' Poets, Adrian Henri, that I always liked as a teenager. I still have the poetry books, well-thumbed from that time long ago. The other day I browsed through them and came across the poem again.
It's a strange poem, probably not to everyone's taste. Henri has taken Wordsworth's famous 'Daffodils' poem and spliced it with a Dutch advert for a car. (Yeah, weird, but I like weird.)

Here's the first part of it:


"THE NEW FAST AUTOMATIC DAFFODILS
by Adrian Henri


I wandered lonely as
THE NEW FAST AUTOMATIC DAFFODIL,
FULLY AUTOMATIC
that floats on high o'er vales and hills
The Daffodil is generously dimensioned to accommodate four
adult passengers
10,000 saw I at a glance
Nodding their new anatomically shaped heads in sprightly
dance
Beside the lake beneath the trees
in three bright modern colours
red, blue and pigskin
The Daffodil de luxe is equipped with a host of useful
accessories
including windscreen wipers and washer with joint control
A Daffodil doubles the enjoyment of touring at home or
abroad

......"


I showed the poem to the kids. Then, egged on by their interest,'You mean you actually like it?!', I printed out another Wordsworth poem, and gave them some old magazines to make their own 'Mutant Wordsworth' poem.


So, this is the original they were working with:





Hmm..well it doesn't really float my boat. But take a look at the new improved version by ds1:



(alterations to the original are marked in bold type below)


"THE RAINBOW

By Public Relations


My luxury car leaps up when I behold

Cheaper online access in the sky

So was it when my life began

So is it now I am a van;

So be it when I shall grow old

Or let me fly



The child is father of the car that is man

And I could wish my days to be

Bound each to each by the tax increase."


So, you see, whatever you think of poetry - and most of the time I think it's a pile of pompous pants - it really is just playing with words. Yep that's all it boils down to. Iambic pentameters (or should that be pompous pantameters?) aside, there are times when poetry can be crude and fun. And - though I've only just noticed - ds1 has even kept the rhyme correct in some of the lines - man/van, sky/fly. There was no prompting from me, I gave them free reign to do as they wished with old Wordy. Blimey! That means my child actually READ the poem and THOUGHT about which words would fit best.

Sometimes we seriously underestimate our kids, don't we?

3 comments:

Sam said...

I like the new poem - epecially the first two lines. Great idea :-)

Mine would probably just roll their eyes at me!

globeonmytable said...

Love it!!

MadameSmokinGun said...

That is SO fab!

Not big on Wordsyworthy myself. Prefer the laudenam (how d'you spell that?) soaked loony poets myself. If I'm gonna wade thro' some blocks of type, make it bonkers and I might stay awake. Fluffy clouds etc zzzzzzzzzz....

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